Friday, January 14, 2011

Invincible, She and Danny's got the car tonight

I've toyed with doing these challenges sponsored by Velvet Verbosity many times but just haven't. In my current State of Funk, today is the day. As always, I can only control my reaction to my SoF, not precisely what is causing it. Whatever.

The word for this week's challenge is Invincible.

Title: Invincible, She

Pulling herself along the wooden handrails along the corridor walls and paddling with her feet, Anna shuffled slowly down the noisy hall toward the dining room. As she inched forward, her thoughts focused on an earlier time when she had run hurdles and track in high school and college. She passed other residents slumped and asleep in their wheelchairs without seeming to notice them at all. 


She smiled to herself in satisfaction as she crossed the threshold on the dot of noon and steered herself to her favorite table by the window. She had come in first once again. 

Updated on Saturday, January 15th.


A second entry that couldn't be contained any longer.

Title: Danny's got the car tonight


"Aw, man!" Jared's longish hair swung with outrage, his hands clenched into fists.

"I said NO and that's it." I continued washing dishes to cover my shaking hands and avoided looking at him.

"Aw, Mom..." He knew arguing was futile.

"You know how those boys are, Jared. Going with them will only get you into trouble." I tried reasoning with my preciously 16-year-old, as if that was even possible."



"Maybe not tonight but it will happen, you mark my words."


He stomped away, furious.


"You're not invincible at 16, y'know!" I called as the slamming door rattled the house.



This is a second entry to Velvet Verbosity's 100 Word Challenge on the word invincible.

10 comments:

Sarah said...

I enjoyed this take on the word. Everyone's interpretation of Invincible changes depending on their life situation. Welcome to the challenge :D

June Anderson said...

Welcome! Nice one. I like that the lady was pleased with her accomplishment.

Tara R. said...

This was wonderful. I like that your take on the theme implied the word, without using the it, leaving it to the reader to interpret it.

barbara said...

Bravo, Anna!!!! I love this. Thanks for writing it. (begone SoF!!!)

Katherine said...

You write beautifully! I could picture her shuffling along and making it to the finish line. :)

Visiting for the first time and am STRUCK by your family picture. The little red head girl could be a picture of my daughter! :)

Bo said...

Nice! I hope to have that much strength in me when I am where she is.

rhymereasonandreality said...

Loved them both...very well written!!!

Rhoni said...

I'm so glad you joined the challenge. Your entries were great. The second resonated with me...probably b/c I have a 14 yr old already showing these signs. (shudder)

you gotta wonder said...

Two completely different entries, different times of life, but well-captured. I'm glad you joined us!

Velvet Verbosity said...

I have a small critique on the first one, and only because it tripped up the story for me which was otherwise delightful.

You used "along" twice in the first sentence, and it ends up detracting somewhat from the texture of the story.

But I love the spark of this character!